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Valentine Poetry 09, Page 1

Valentine Poetry Competition


Winners: Valentine Poetry Competition, 2009

"Goodbye, Love”

by [Chimes]


by [Acceber]

”Sangria bird sings”

by [Linderel]

”Hemp Rope”

by [Tickle Me Emo]

"The Search"

by [Tickle Me Emo]


Thank you to all that contributed!


This Contest is Closed!


1. Dark of Night

In the dark of the night,
Always, I come to thee,
And with the first blush of dawn
I miserably must leave.

Our Spring and Summer
Now has come, but
Autumn’s long nights fast approach
And, soon, I fear must Winter.

Our life is lived within the night,
And there our love resides,
But night is fleeting, and with it goes
My life and soul as well.

For I abide in darkness,
The light is my demise.
As the bright sun rises, so my soul
Flies back down to Hell.

Death is all that‘s known to me,
And immortality is mine.
But little comfort comes from this,
As I must destroy to survive.

Those to whom I give my heart
All are doomed to die,
For Time is a jealous mistress
And waits for no ones will.

So sigh my love, and let me go
Now at break of dawn.
No tears let fall, but rejoice
For you live on this day.

When your time is nigh,
And Death does come for you,
Then shall I pull you from His grasp
And make you mine for true.

And then, My Lord, we shall love
With no care of dark and light
Then we’ll share in all my gifts
And be Immortal forevermore.

Written by [AvalonsDaughter]

2. Love's A Killer.

I love how letters fall,
Like paper birds,
Or maybe butterflies.
I love how arrows point,
And hit targets beneath armour,
Or rock covering a stony heart.
I like it when needles stick,
And when pins prick.
It’s like love’s raping you in the face,
Breaking teeth with thrusts,
That rip apart your insides.
Did they tell you?
Do you know?
How I keep falling apart.
Sometimes my clogs stop turning,
And my eyes start burning.
As my heart starts pounding.
Maybe I should cough it up,
Spit out the romance on the floor.
I’ll decorate the halls with my guts,
And I’ll staple my heart to the wall,
Just so you can find it,
When your busy breaking me.

Written by [Rice]

3. Distortion

BANG – I went,
Like party poppers at Christmas,
With pretty red lights and bows on,
You know the velvet makes me tingle.
Maybe I should release a single.
Yes, no?
Believe me I’m a super star,
And I’m far from here,
In fact, I’m a little too gone to remember you.
Or your face, or the way we moved that night,
Oh the heat,
Euphoria beneath the sheets.
My darling we moved like angels,
Fallen so hard,
That love loses its guard and we end up taking,
Instead of making our love real.
What’s the deal?
With perfections and sweet infections
Of a mind so lost,
So under,
That even murder has its affections.

Written by [Rice]

4. Wicked

There's a gleam there,
In his eyes and on his face,
Where hollow thoughts breed
Lies and tricks to ensnare.
A goddess he sees with his vicious
Eyes and teeth and tongue and lips,
To have for his own, his only wish.

It's a wicked thing, really,
If you'd care to look
At the scars on her arms
And her face, her neck
And her heart.
For a goddess to lower
Her wits and her smarts only
To hear the whip crack and
Fire crackle.

She loves him, of course,
When she's tied up with thorns
And left dripping and gaping
Out into the night.
Her wounds and her batters
A signature to her sinister
Love, a tribute to her holy suffering.

For a wicked man with,
Eyes of fire, hath stolen
A heart and left it broken, beating.
Untie, pull out thorns, heal the wounds
She'll still not leave.
For the love of a goddess is love indeed.

Written by [Chimes]

5. A Million Tears

Although a million tears my heart has cried,
They cannot seem to wash away
From my heart within, a love that does reside.
Although I sometimes wish and pray,
In torrential downpours flood,
Free me from the hopeless abyss
Cleanse me, use my very blood.
It is pointless to love, painfully miss,
Long for another, when it can never be.
Use thy sword, my dearest, please set me free!

Although my heart has cried a million tears,
They cannot seem to wash away
The love within my heart.
If I lived beyond a million, trillion years.
The love I know and feel today,
The sting would be as smart.
So my love, please hesitate no more.
Unsheathe thy sword, my dearest dear,
Plunge it deeply true, I beg of thee, implore.
From my lips one final time you'll hear,
In a whisper of my last breath,
"I love you as no other" as I meet with death.

You shall be released from
The chains that hold you tight.
When I become your guardian angel,
I will free you from your plight.
It is then you'll know the magnitude
How deep my love is, surreal.
Just know this my love,
Even death cannot repeal.

Written by [Artsieladie]

6. Goodbye, Love

There you are, Love,
We've been searching
For days.
How are you still smiling, Love?
When you're twisted and broken
And inside out,
All at the same time.
You can't be comfortable, Love,
When covered in pins and
Cupid's standing on that tiny flickering,
Flittering butterfly that you
Cherish and hold
In that little jar by the window.
You're not here are you, Love?
You've gone away, only your
Pretty little carcass remains.
You've really done it, haven't you,
I'm sorry, Love.
I didn't mean to push you,
To make you leave,
To make you see
This empty shell of me.

Written by [Chimes]

7. The Last Moment

Tears running down her face.
She knew it was her last moment.
She had held the pain in for years,
But no longer could she hold it in.
She held the gun to her head,
I'll love him till the end.
She said, now it's the end.
Now I can be with you.
She sat beside the wooden cross a moment longer.
Why does it have to be this way?
I wanted us to grow old and die happy.
When you died you were mad.
When I die, I will be sad.
Should I seek revenge for my pain,
Before I come to be with you?
No, know revenge!
I want to die now.
One last breath then,
She pulls the trigger.

Written by [Heather Thomason]

8. Lace

I watch you sleeping,
I see your face,
I love how you look,
In that white lace.

I hear you breathing,
So soft and sweet,
I touch your red lips,
Heart skips a beat.

I smell your perfume,
I move your hair,
Your shoulder and neck,
So pale and bare.

Then everything stops,
Deep blue eyes stare,
Red lips start to scream,
This I can’t bear.

I taste your wet blood,
As I bite deep,
White lace turns crimson,
It starts to seep.

You begin to cry,
It wets my face,
I start ripping up,
Your crimson lace.

I hit your pale skin,
That stops your tears,
I hear no breathing,
Your death is near.

I watch you sleeping,
I see your face,
I love how you look,
In that ripped lace.

Written by [Acceber]

9. Sincere

Rough words from those lips,
I see the shine in your eyes.
You yell and yell,
So I just smile.

The spit from your words,
Touch my face.
You're so close,
I love the warmth.

Your fist clashes with the wall,
And I reach, to touch your face.
Your manly hand strikes my face,
I then lean, for the kiss.

You shove me against the wall,
My throat burns, from the clench.
You mumble with that low voice,
Only makes me love you more.

Your touch brings security,
That I so very need.
You act so different,
When everyone's looking.

I love the touches,
And I love the words.
Your arms on me,
Or them around me.

I know you scream and yell,
Because you're scared.
It's okay love,
I love you 'til death do us part.

Written by [Tynuka-Rhytishy]

10. Sangria bird sings

Red of heart, of soul, of hand
her reality is this impassioned act
this prison that she cannot stand
a glass shell that could not be cracked

Captive, shamed and on display
yet her fire-tipped wings burn
even as they begin to fray
and a bitter hatred, churn

All those lies have left her helpless
stranded, with shreds of dignity
hanging about in fragile threads
but she does not want their pity

Weakened yet still not broken
she'll smile till everything blurs
and tear his own heart wide open
as thanks for twisting hers

Written by [Linderel]

11. Dripping sand

I shall spin the web of heartless solitude
Leaving nothing save myself
Time heals all things and as the world turns backwards
I shall reap the benefit of my knowledge
You can't tell me everything and
As the words drip like sands
Passing through an hourglass - overturned
I realize that time will not slow for me
- For us
I shall look upon my dearly
And love like one who has lost
Savoring moments of nothing save joy and happiness
- Banish the dark
Present the good onto the holy
And hold the words unsaid in cold and cracking hands
As soft snowfall blankets the world
And time stands not still but creeping - slowly
Towards a time when I can be with you again.

Written by [Alexi Ice]

12. Denial?

I look at you
And you look away.
I smile at you
Yet you have nothing to say.
I love you
Or at least I used to.

Written by [Alexi Ice]

13. Lethal Love

Aphrodite was the Goddess of Love
And she watched high on Olympus above
There was a youth who loved no woman on earth,
But himself, and his own pretty face.

As he sighed and he swooned
He did not notice the moon
As it continuously rose
And then fell in the sky

Days passed and he sat and he stared
Senses gone, and he unaware
Until he slipped into the reflection
Of his own image and drowned

Where his body once lay
Still to this day the blue bulbs bloom.
Where the boy met his doom;
Narcissus, he who loved only himself. 

Written by [Aries Undomna]

14. Sick Love

I was always there in his arms.
I always felt so safe and secure.
Nothing could hurt me, there was no harm.
He told me so whenever I wasn't sure.
He kissed me and told me he loved me so much.
He held me and never let me go.
I kissed him back and said things of the such.
He always tried touching me even when I said no.
I didn't want to, I didn't love him like this.
I wanted him to love me like he was my dad.
It became worse with every touch, feel, and kiss.
Each time I told him no he just got mad.
I started getting bruises on my arms and legs.
I still love him, I just want this to stop.
I get too scared to say no each time he begs.
He over powers me and climbs on top.
I tell him to get off of me as I push and shove.
I just want him to show me my daddy's love.

Written by [FamousPanda]

15. Was not meant to be

There I was floating along in the water.
I saw her swimming in the distance.
It was love at first sight.
I knew this is who i wanted to be with forever.
She came swimming up and I said hello.
One look at me and she went crazy.
I knew I was good looking but, man.
The look in her eye told me she wanted me.
I wiggled over to her and she snapped at me.
Was it love or hunger she had towards me?
She bit my bottom, but no harm done.
My love for her still flared inside.
I tried speaking to her, to calm her down.
But all she wanted to do was eat me.
I started to give up and squirmed away.
She came up behind me and slurped me right down.
Everything started to move really fast.
Within a minute I was back out and there she lay.
I went flying through the air and back to water.
I guess love can't work between a worm and a fish.

Written by [FamousPanda]

16. Hemp Rope

A fetish wound round a tree
Swing along let lovers be
brave in their simplicity
Alone would seem enough to me

Too soon black heart lover die
One left lone let loose a sigh
Prayers and thoughts go heaven high
The end to all will cometh nigh.

Written by [Tickle Me Emo]

17. The Curtain Falls

He sees her as through glass at her place upon the stage.
Where only players reach her in the glittering world that's made.

With baited breath he watches as they move with air and grace.
Her beauty fine, with eyes so green and a rosy smiling face.

Every night he's been there and every line he knows.
With each repeated move she makes his passion only grows.

Yet, fast the endings drawing near and she'll soon be out of reach.
His goddess will retreat to reality behind walls he can not breech.

Then the closing curtain falls and the show is finally done.
He understands that it's his last chance to meet his beloved one.

He lingers till the last have gone, then the stage he slips behind.
Down long dark halls, a stumbling search his darling for to find.

Soon he finds the door he seeks and quietly enters in.
She turns to see, then shock and fear replace her cheerful grin.

Although he finds her voice divine he can't imagine why she screams,
and he must admit that this is not the scenario of his dreams

Panic bound he reached out and grasps her swanlike throat.
Tightening fingers 'round her neck, he cuts off a final note.

The gasping starts and she struggles more, but soon it's all for not.
The body stills and the breath soon leaves the one he dearly sought.

Behind the walls the shouting starts and the door flies open wide
He will not run although she's dead, for his love he cannot hide.

When they lead him to the gallows hill there's no regret for his crime.
The noose pulls taut and he pictures her face as the church bells toll and chime.

Written by [Crankychangeling]

18. Your Love

Don’t be afraid to hurt me
If it makes you stay away
Don’t hesitate to kill me
If that would make your day.

I’m here just to help you,
To keep you company.
You have been my taboo,
Kill the nymphomany.

Do what you find right,
Force me to obey.
Hunt me through the night,
Let me be your prey.

Do rip off the clothes I wear,
They might aswell be sold.
I don’t mind being bare,
Just leave me in the cold.

Don’t be afraid to cut me,
I'm but a heap of meat.
Whatever you claim to be,
I’ll still find you sweet.

Written by [hannes]

19. Neglected

At times I love her
when she comes to bed
and shares her warmth.

At times I hate her
when she leaves me
alone in the cold.

In spite of
my passion for her,
she barely knows I exist.

That’s the inequity of a mite’s life.

Written by [hannes]

20. Lost

I look up in your eyes and see your love.
The fire in my eyes scares away my one true love.

The thorns upon the roses pierce my skin.
Crimson blood pours out and forms a shape.
The broken heart of blood vanishes.

The storm has just come and I wait for you.
I see you in your boat just off the coast.
You see me and wave, I blow you a kiss.
Crackling lightning and far off thunder sound.
You hurry ashore but too late.
The lightning sinks your ship.

You appear now as a ghost and I cry.
I run away and take my life.
Now we can be together forever.
On this Valentines Day.

Written by [Gaaras Girlfriend]

21. Twisted Love: Untwist It, My Love

He watches from the shadows her each and every move.
He has not the courage, afraid that he will prove,
Cast a cloud so dark, ominous, and bleak,
If he talks to her, he darest not to speak.
The label that he carries, branded on his head,
No social skills, expressionless, cruelly it's been spread.

She knows he's watching her, although in silence he keeps,
So she hides from him, when alone in heartbreak, she weeps.
In her secret places, she gives him hugs and kisses,
The distance he maintains, it is he she always misses.
Her life is always busy, but she stops to notice him,
Declares her love and admiration, though her hope is growing dim.

Reassurance she has given him, time and time again,
But his insecurity, its chains, have truly captured him.
Her spirit, although free, cannot it so embrace,
Her happiness relies on his, but there's no smile upon his face.
Instead she sees the tears that flood his bleeding heart,
The chains that enwrap him, she cannot pull apart.

She wants to flee as her wild spirit commands,
But her heart's been taken. It has its own demands.
Even though he hides, she sees him plain as day,
She loves all that others have so gladly cast away.
The treasure that she found when she took a closer look,
She knows she can't describe between the covers of a book.

To make the matters worse, as if they could be,
He is also trapped in a sea of jealousy.
Not of her nor of him is this beast so borne,
But of the past that haunts him, an evil woman's scorn.
The love that he so longs for, he must jeopardise,
Because of the vengeful daggers all in sweet disguise.

Others know the truth, but silent they remain,
Yet they judge him as they justify refrain.
So, I ask here, just which is twisted most,
He for his fear instilled by those that falsely boast
Or the warped mind of a jealous, revengeful soul,
That like a spoiled child, keeps blackmail on the dole?

Written by [Artsieladie]

22. "Love Burns"

I try to stay quiet...
But my heart burns with fire.
I don't want to start our love a riot...
But you bruise all of my desire.

Like a ghost dancing on the minds wall...
My uncontrollable thoughts make me feel quite irrational.
My anger builds up, swaying me like hell's fall...
Saying I love you but you hurt me would be quite factual.

You sneak through the seams in my sleep, making me want you there...
Then I awake, and realize sleep is much better than reality.
You speak something hateful, then I see love in quite unfair...
I swear, I think that love is the biggest fatality.

I believe there is a storm in the distance...
Our fighting destroys love's optimism.
Our chaos breaks loves resistance...
Each day screams "De Ja Vu", and sorry to say, but sometimes it feels like this is some screwed up anachronism.

I'd rather be dead, then deal with your nonsense...
But there's something unbearably compelling about you.
Not treating me well, when I'm such a fireball...ha, you're quite dense.
Interesting that the demons behind your eyes, they chant that they love me, when it's never true.

Valentines day will be so desolate, you know...
You rip my heart, then stitch it up, day after day...
What stings more, is this pain, it sets in slow...
So may your flowers be rotten, and your chocolates filled with blood, and with that, that's all I've left to say.

Written by [Kitailec]

23. "Pulsing Beat"

Your words are like veins that grasp the pulsing core.
Though you are absent to my touch, it feels so much that you stand beside me.
This cautious connection has such a distance, but I do hope that in due time it's easily more.
Before your silkening embrace, I thought love and I...we simply could not be.

One day I hope to be your calming breeze.
My only wish is to be your spirit, your warmth, your protection.
I shall show you the difference from your past; you'll know a love that will never cease.
I will heal your heart with endearing affection.

You have given me courage and faith that was never there before.
Your personality, the sound of your voice, the sight of know nothing of what magnificence you do hold.
With small words it was so easy you enveloped my heart and closed such painful a door.
Only love explains your true significance to me, my true passion for you, and I promise life holds nothing else as sentimental and bold.

There's nothing stronger than how I feel for you...
This passion, so strong, it's like a mountain side...
And without a doubt, I know you love me too.
Your returning of care, it's like an emotional rock slide.

But what is sad, my love, is you're but a ghost.
A memory that has set in, and turned me to flesh stone.
Is there a day you'll be my Valentine's Day host?
No, I fear...I'll always be alone.

Written by [Kitailec]

24. This is a lovely poem, but unfortunately, as it is, it does not fit the theme "Twisted Love". There is still time to change the entry, if this is wished.
2009-02-07 20:00:32
/The Council.

Love is...

...Something that is more then power
Is the force that makes us alive
You can find it in a flower
You can taste it in a dream
And it is always better then it seems.

Is something that makes you believe
That you can see a new path
Better then chocolate
Way better then the air we breath.

Love is the force that makes us write poems
the beautiful power of smiling
Love is about family
Is about friendship
Is about a whole

A whole mix of feelings
The only thing that makes you want to scream thank you
Love can make you look like a fool
And also see it all through a whole new level
That's love

Written by [Shjahjdahdvwa]

25. Unnatural

She recieved flowers at work,
Knowing who they were from.
What could bring such a man,
To persue someone so numb?
He watched her through the day,
Completely invisible to her here.
For he was a stranger to her world,
His home was what people feared.
She occasionally felt extremely warm,
Knowing it was from his touch.
She did not even know his name,
She should have known that much.
He ran his hand up her arm,
She would at least feel his heat.
That was all he could do for her,
And even that was a feat.
His love for her was unnatural,
Her's for him was worse.
He was a demon, she a human,
And their love was a curse.
It was not normal,
Yet as twisted as it seemed,
They were together now,
And they were a team.

Written by [Flisky]

26. Dear Skeleton Harvester,

You own my heart, like a stock investor,
You reap skeletons, like you’ve reaped my mind,
I’m sure behind that “giant-X-scar-face,” you’re very kind,
You have a wing like an angel, and a soft claw paw,
The way you walk off balance, just makes me go “Aww,”
When I watch you work, it just seems so surreal,
I wish I had the courage to walk up to you, and tell you how I feel.

On the beautiful day that you do burst through my door,
Please hold me close because my legs would become gelatin.


Dear Sarah,

Skeleton, skeleton, skeleton, skeleton, skeleton, skeleton.

Written by [Doormat]

27. Twisted Love Night

I hate you,
I dispise you,
I love to make you cry,
Your pain is my pleasure,
burning inside.
Soon you will see
What your pain means to me,
Why I live to be the reason
You have slits beneath your sleeves.

You are the reason I believe,
in pain before pleasure,
my life before your death,
nothing else above the rest.
You are the reason,
my feelings,
burn so bright,
You are the reason I stay
sane threw my nights.

These words were spoken,
and he watched while I cried,
he knew my soul was dying,
hidden deep inside.
He knew my pain would soon overtake,
and he begged to watch,
as I pulled out the blade.

Yes, he watched,
as the slits became gashes,
that I slowly lacerated,
deep into the blood flowing
rivers of my veins.
He smiled with pride,
at the pain he had created,
watching as death slowly overcame.

He was still smiling,
as he pulled out his phone,
and dialed three numbers,
that glowed like exposed bone.
He slowly whispered,
its not time yet, my darling,
I still have a little more fun in store...

Written by [IceFae]

28.  Dreams

I had that dream again you were in it.
It hurts to think about it.
You were holding me tight with all your might.
You let go of me as I gazed at the stars.
You are the only thing I see.
You are my warmth, like the sun.
You are my light when it's dark.

Blank is your name loving me is your game.
Not only that I know that you love me.
I hope you know that I love you too.
I think about you a lot more then I should.
I'll doing anything for you, as I know you'll do the same for me.
Knowing you will always be there for me.
Care for me, love, hold, and kiss me.

You seem so far away.
You left me alone here.
Why did you leave me?
Will you come back?

I had that dream again you were in it.
It's hurts to talk about it.
You are going away, I feel cold.
What can I do to see you?
To be near you?
Just to be with you one more time.

When you let go of me I seem empty inside.
Wondering what you’ll do next.
What you'll say.
You turned your back on me when I needed you the most.

Blank is your name loving me was your game.
You are so far away from me.
You might have hurt me.
But no matter what I will always love you.
Even in my dreams.

Written by [Bulma]

29. Sunshine

The scars
In your name
Tear my heart
Into thrilling

Voice of siren
Gather ‘round
She’s always mine
Never doubt
What she says
Who she’s with
She cannot kiss
When she still miss-es

All mine
But with others
I only see.
Love is a word
Loosely defining hate
Love is disguised
As devotion
Stumble back
To me.

Written by [Tragedy In Trend]

30. Divided

A voice that poses no threat
Only red petals-
Silky and smooth.
Dying to purple,
Then wilting to black
A sob may be heard.
As well as a wicked laugh.
It sounds like bells
Then fades to hoarse,
Hacked and twisted-
Somehow it stays
Milky smooth
As well. It entices
The senses and draws you in, drugged,
but no don't follow
I do all the time -
All mistakes.
She breaks me.

The shy pleading mouthed words are shown
In eyes but never acted upon
She begs and begs for me to slow down,
To listen but I don't of course. I run and run
But it always feels the same.
It all looks the same too.
Like a desert, everything's plain.
Everything needed you can't see.
The dry lump of thirst spreads from the tip of the tongue
All through
To the pit
Of my stomach.

The wicked one tells me, or myself
To bat a lash and I'll be out;
The shy voice tells me to break down and find myself - fill my thirst
Instead I fight my tears, my hurts
And bite my words
And find myself in a new environment
Same situation. Same question ringing through my ears and highlighting in my eyes:
What are we doing?
(Who am I going to be?)

Written by [Tragedy In Trend]

31. Yours, No Matter What

Every day you violently wake me,
Yell at me without a single hesitation.
I face this ordeal blindly,
For you say beauty lies deep within desperation.

A pale smile crosses my face,
As I lie on this cold floor.
I don’t fear this dangerous place,
Your safety is what I adore.

Though I feel the blood run,
I also feel your hand, holding the knife.
Your face is still like the sun,
Ever shining, ‘t is what keeps me alive.

Written by [Tableau Vivant]

32. The Search

I tried the candy-man
but he was like spun sugar:
Good but essentially intangible.

I went to the tailor
but his needle pricked my heart
and failed to stitch it up.

Next I loved the bird-man…
Homing pigeons are useful only
if it’s you they come back to.

The chef was as deaf
As a mouse on meth
(good food, though)-
A musician will only listen
When his guitar pick is missin’
(I stole it)-
While a hatter says the latter
Is always what’s the matter

I finally found Mr. Mob Boss.
It was an unusual coupling
but at least he knew commitment.

Written by [Tickle Me Emo]


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2009-01-17 [Alexi Ice]: Oh yummy, a vampire entry eh? I totally stole my theme! Good job! ^^ And way to be prompt! Goodness, the voting just closed!!! ^^ hehehe

2009-01-17 [Artsieladie]: That was quick! :)

2009-01-18 [AvalonsDaughter]: well it was either this one, or the one about a love triangle (which you can read on my diary). i figured this one fit the theme better :D

2009-01-18 [Alexi Ice]: They both sound like they would fit pretty well, actually.

2009-01-18 [Artsieladie]: I agree with Mitsuki. :)

2009-01-18 [Acceber]: [Drixt], you have to add your entry to the page. Just press Edit, and add it after [Rice]s entry =)

2009-01-18 [Rice]: Can I swear in my poem?

2009-01-18 [Rice]: I figured not so I changed the swear word -_-

2009-01-18 [Acceber]: It's good [Rice]...I think it doesn't need the swear word =)

2009-01-18 [Rice]: Thanks a lot ^^
I'm just about to put up my secound one..this theme filled me with ideas.

2009-01-18 [Acceber]: It is a great theme... I just hope we get a lot more entries ^_^

2009-01-18 [Rice]: Yes, loads and loads of poems would be amazing.
Though hard for the voters to pick one I guess.
So many people are good at poetry.

2009-01-19 [Alexi Ice]: I belive, [Rice] that it all depends on the word. I do not belive one tiny little curse word shall hurt anyone, but I could be wrong.

Also - I belive that the poetry sections are not judged by public poll. From my understanding these official contests are judged by the crew, unless it is an art contest in which case it is done by the Elftowners.

2009-01-19 [Tynuka-Rhytishy]: You'd be surprised, Mitsuki, lol.

I plan on entering this. I need some inspiration. I'm not great at poetry, but you only get better by practicing.

2009-01-19 [Alexi Ice]: [Drixt] - Not only do you need to place your entry on the actual page by clicking the 'edit' page button and adding it under the next seperation line but also, please fix the format of your entry. Please also capitolize all 'I''s and it might be helpful to run your poem through spell check before submitting it to the actual page, as well. The first letter of ever seperate line should also be capitolized. Thank you

Your poem should be in this format



Written by [Drixt]

Thank you. If you need anymore assistance, please feel free to ask me for help.

2009-01-19 [Drixt]: well no disrespect but i dont think the capitolization is mandatory i mean i didnt leave it like that for a reason but thats just how i write. and there are no spelling errors, like you mentioned nothings capitolized but that would be a grammatical error, not a spelling error. not trying to be a butt, just didnt know i was being graded

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: Capitalisation and punctuation are not necessary, except with "I". "I" must be capitalised. If you choose to use or not use either (capitalisation and/or punctuation), then follow all the way through your poem with the same usage or lack there of, except with "I", which must be capitalised.

Personally, I think titles should be capitalised, too, with the exception of the articles, 'a', 'and', and 'the', unless they appear at the beginning or ending of a title, which then, they are capitalised. Just as with the art, we expect your best effort. This includes correct grammar and spelling. An occasional typo is possible by anyone, however.

As far as swear words, a swear word here and there is not the end of the world, but an unnecessary amount is uncalled for and inappropriate. The goal is not to censor anyone's thoughts and/or creativity, but to keep in mind and respect those who will be reading your poem, for this is a "public" contest, an official contest, not a wiki page where you are totally free to state things as you wish AND where you can keep it private among you and your friends. Words that insult, desecrate, demean, etc., any group of people in regards to their race, culture, gender, sexual orientation, etc., are not allowed. ..And might I remind everyone entering, this is an 'all age' site. Therefore, keep your poems expressive, but tasteful.

Now let's see some more poetry! :D

Thank you, [Acceber] and [Alexi Ice]! :D [Drixt], if you copied and pasted your poem "AS IS" here and submitted it to the Daily Poem "AS IS" here, how it is received there, is how it will be received here. ;)

2009-01-19 [Drixt]: well its staying the way it is and if thats not good enough then sorry cuz i copied it from the publication email i received and they did publish it AS IS

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: Oh, it can stay here, but it just won't be considered as a valid entry AS IS. Just like each publisher requires a certain format before they will consider accepting a written work for publication (which varies from publisher to publisher), this is not so different here. Every publisher has their own set of rules, their own format, that you as an author must comply with if you seek their services. The choice is then left up to the author as to how he/she will proceed and whether or not they want to be bothered to comply with the publisher's non-negotiable format and rules.

2009-01-19 [Drixt]: well i dont consider you a publisher so i respectfully pull my entry.

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: I didn't state that we are a publisher, but in the loose sense of the term, we might be considered as such, because this page is 'published' on the internet. But the point was, is that there are rules and formats to be followed when you submit your works anywhere. If you choose to submit, then it is up to you as the author to respect and follow the rules applicable. I'm sorry that you felt the need to remove your poem, when all that was asked is that you comply with the very few and simple rules being asked for here. But it is your choice. 

2009-01-19 [Drixt]: sorry all, not irritated with you, just taking it out that way. if it needs to be a certain way thats cool but i think ill keep my entry out just because i already made myself look like a butt and everyone is probably tired of me. so anyway thanks for the comments all and good luck!

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: I wish you wouldn't feel that way! We all have our moments. As far as I'm concerned, you are welcome to submit your poem here and now you know what's expected. <img:stuff/cheshmak.gif>

2009-01-19 [Alexi Ice]: Yeah, [Drixt] no one wants you to withdrawl your entry, it is a very good one it's just...all Elftowners have been following these rules and guidlines since the beggining of our fair community and to make exceptions now would cause nothing short of a riot.

And Artsie, No problem! You know I love sticking my nose in where it doesn't belong and playing council member <3 Lol. I know how busy you can be and that you can't mod everything. I am always here to help ^^

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: *huggles* I wubs you and your help! :D

2009-01-19 [Alexi Ice]: *Huggle* No problem at all, of course!

2009-01-19 [Artsieladie]: Ok... I have a poem of mine that I'm going to post. Since this theme, "Twisted Love", is broad, it seems that it fits, but I would like everyone's opinion, because I'm not sure if it would be considered 'twisted enough'. :P

2009-01-19 [Alexi Ice]: Alright! I offer up my opinion!

2009-01-20 [Heather Thomason]: is my poem okay? i think it fits under twisted love

2009-01-20 [Acceber]: Yeah, I think it fits the theme [Heather Thomason], but you need to fix some of the capital letters...every line needs to start with one. And maybe you could add some punctuation too (full stops where you think necessary). :)

2009-01-20 [Heather Thomason]: is it better?

2009-01-20 [Acceber]: Yeah, I think it's fine now =)

2009-01-20 [Heather Thomason]: thank you for helping me out

2009-01-20 [Acceber]: No problem, it's my job :)

2009-01-20 [Linderel]: *pops in* I think I need to get my muse working again, I don't really have anything that I like that would suit the theme. Possibly Lilting Lavender, but I'll need opinions on that account.

As for the debate about capitalisation: I agree with Artsie. As I've always said over at the DP, it's all the same to me how you capitalise and punctuate your poem, just as long as grammar and spelling are correct and the 'I' is capitalised.

2009-01-20 [Artsieladie]: Thank you Lin. I'll look at Lilting Lavender. :)

2009-01-21 [Linderel]: Hope you like this one. :3

2009-01-21 [Alexi Ice]: I just cleaned up the page, in case you were wondering, Artsie.

2009-01-21 [Alexi Ice]: The second one of mine is mostly a placeholder. Lol.

2009-01-22 [Artsieladie]: Thanks, Mitsuki! You keep this up, and I might find ways to put you to work! lol

Yes, I like this one Lin and I liked Lilting Lavender, too, but I wasn't sure about it. It was like "Yeah, but maybe not." kinda'. In fact, I'm still not sure about my entry, either, because I think it's borderline. :P

2009-01-23 [Alexi Ice]: Put me to work? I like the sound of that!!!

2009-01-23 [Artsieladie]: I thought you might say something like that! ;D

2009-01-23 [Alexi Ice]: Of course! Or something like...

2009-01-23 [Artsieladie]: I could use some help editing pages. Wanna' help? There are a lot of pages that need editing. It can seem a little monotonous, though. Would you be up for it? ;)

2009-01-23 [Alexi Ice]: OF course I would be up for it!!!! I will have a whole day of free time tommorow, but I have class in an hour so I won't be able to get much done today, if that's ok. Send me a PM with my instructions, captin!

2009-01-23 [Artsieladie]: Ok, will do! We need to connect with an IM somehow, though. It's a lot easier to explain and communicate with IM than it is through messages here. Besides, it's easier to have a little fun when you talk back and forth with IM, too. I heard you come on earlier, but then you were gone again. Aroooo! ;P

2009-01-23 [Alexi Ice]: Ok I will be online then, class was postponed so I will be on for an hour more, or maybe a little longer...IDK. My teacher is a spazz. Lol

2009-02-03 [Linderel]: I don't really see how your entry fits the theme, [Shjahjdahdvwa]...

2009-02-03 [Rice]: I agree with Linderel, it's sort of very 'lovey-dovey', not really dark or twisted like the theme needs.

2009-02-03 [Alexi Ice]: Agreed. Also, and Linderel feel free to correct me but I belive in this part of [Shjahjdahdvwa]'s poem;

Better then chocolate
Way better then the air we breath.

Should be;

Better than chocolate
Way better than the air we breathe.

2009-02-03 [Rice]: I think you're right with the corrections.

2009-02-03 [Linderel]: Indeed that is true. In fact, every 'then' in that poem should be 'than'.

2009-02-03 [Artsieladie]: I agree that the poem doesn't fit the theme. It's about love, but not about "Twisted Love" as far as I can tell. Yes, also, on the 'then' should be 'than'. :P 

2009-02-04 [Alexi Ice]: Alright I thought so but I was unsure. breath and breathe should be switched as well I belive,

[Shjahjdahdvwa] - Maybe you should try the Daily poem instead?

2009-02-04 [Linderel]: Indeed it should. I seem to have gone temporarily blind, usually I spot these things right away...

2009-02-04 [Alexi Ice]: ! No worries...We just learned about words like breath and breathe in english so the rule was stuck in my head.

2009-02-04 [Linderel]: Wait, what? Only just now?

2009-02-04 [Artsieladie]: lol ;)

2009-02-04 [Chimes]: ... Yeah. Lin, I am having the same "WHAT?!" moment. XD

2009-02-04 [Alexi Ice]: Lol ^^ We are reviewing. Otherwise I wouldn't have bothered noticing it. I'm a college freshman so we have to reveiw EVERYTHING! Lol.

2009-02-04 [Chimes]: I think Lin was shocked that you ONLY JUST learnt about breath and breathe... Or that's what your statement suggested. :P

2009-02-04 [Alexi Ice]: Yeah I re-read it and it did sound a bit elementry. You guys should know that isn't true! How long have I been haunting the council again? Lol.

2009-02-04 [Linderel]: (review)

2009-02-04 [Alexi Ice]: Oh..LOL! Right. Sorry. ^^ I always do that.

2009-02-04 [Chimes]: What point were you trying to make with the haunting of the Council? XD I don't understaaaand.

2009-02-04 [FamousPanda]: I think that she wasn't in elementary school or just learning that lol because she has been around longer than that. -shrugs- XD

2009-02-04 [Chimes]: Aaaah. That would make sense. :P

2009-02-05 [Alexi Ice]: Pretty much and that most of the time I speak at a very sophisticated vocabulary even though I do tend to mis-spell things and you guys should know that because I have known you (well not you but I have been annoying Lindrel) for quite a while now.

2009-02-05 [FamousPanda]: No, no you annoy the rest of us too. =P just kidding just kidding

2009-02-05 [Doormat]: Firefox solves most spelling problems.

2009-02-05 [Chimes]: That is true but firefox is sometimes evil. To me, anyway.

2009-02-05 [Alexi Ice]: Lol! Tis my job. You have to sometimes annoy people to get any kind of recognition! <3

2009-02-05 [Chimes]: But... annoying people doesn't tend to get you good recognition. :P

2009-02-05 [FamousPanda]: But at least there is a recognition. lol

2009-02-05 [Artsieladie]: *sitting in the corner listening* lol

2009-02-05 [Alexi Ice]: Lol ^^ I do get good recognition sometimes by being annoyingly relentless. !

2009-02-05 [Artsieladie]: What's that saying? "The squeaky cog gets the oil." lol ;) *giggling*

2009-02-05 [Alexi Ice]: ! Genious! ^^

2009-02-06 [Artsieladie]: I was just trying to be a wisenheimer! *laughs and tries to look innocent*

2009-02-06 [Doormat]: Did someone say Cog? <img:>

Oh wait...*Slowly backs out of room*

2009-02-06 [FamousPanda]: I got a tablet !!!!! =D -is excited-

2009-02-06 [Artsieladie]: [Doormat].. lol Aww, though. Hello Kitty! ;P

I bet you are [FamousPanda]! Well, now we can expect lots of your wonderful art, right? *winks* I've had a tablet for about 2 years, but I still do all of my computer art with my mouse. :P

2009-02-06 [FamousPanda]: lol I have wanted one for a while now and now I will be needing it for college.. Got accepted to The Art Institute of Pittsburgh Online division. =] and will be starting on the 19th. I am really excited about that too, and of course you do all of your computer art with a mouse [Artsieladie] because you're awesome =D.

2009-02-07 [Doormat]: Ugh, when did this happen? <img:img/mood/61513_1174313826.gif>

2009-02-07 [SilverFire]: As beautiful as Gato's entry is, does it really fit the theme?

2009-02-07 [Chimes]: That conversation happened a bit back in the comments. The conclusion was no, I think they were waiting for Gato.

2009-02-07 [SilverFire]: Whoops. :P Ignore me then. *dances off*

2009-02-07 [Chimes]: Hehe. XD Have fun with the dancing.

2009-02-07 [Artsieladie]: That's great, [FamousPanda]! Congrats! *high five* :)

That's so nice of you to say! But... no, I'm not all that awesome. Pretty much ordinary with some weirdness thrown in and a pinch of silliness for good measure ... or not-so-good measure. hehe ...And I can't take a compliment to save my life, but I appreciate hearing one, nonetheless. ;P

2009-02-07 [Artsieladie]: Thanks, [SilverFire]. I appreciate your opinion as well as anyone's. The more that state about how they see something the better, because then the final decision will be made in accordance with how the most see it and will therefore hold merit hands down. :)

2009-02-07 [FamousPanda]: Thank you [Artsieladie] *high fives* lol Well you should take the compliment lol because it's true. ^-^

2009-02-07 [Artsieladie]: Ok.. if you say so. <img:stuff/sh-gif.gif> :)

2009-02-07 [FamousPanda]: lol =D

2009-02-09 [Doormat]: I feel that I need to give a bit of background on my poem. It was inspired by this comic: 

2009-02-09 [Artsieladie]: Thanks for that, [Doormat]. I like to learn how artists (of any genre) are inspired. :)

2009-02-09 [Doormat]: I got used to writing long explanations for my poems due to a term of English Poetry class. :3

Plus, sometimes it's hard know what the poem is about, especially if it's obscure, like a poem comparing two protesters who self-immolate themselves (unless you're a Prof. who teaches Buddhism and Poetry and have a long and good memory, in which case you can catch out your students on a few minor, blotched facts). 

2009-02-10 [Chimes]: The last four poems need to fix their format slighty. :] On the 'Written by' bit.

2009-02-10 [Artsieladie]: *nods* Eh, I just fixed them. No problem. It seems as soon as one changes the way how their entry is submitted, the ones that follow, follow suit. hehe

2009-02-10 [Tragedy In Trend]: Oh thanks, didn't notice that...I really need to start paying attention. All my online work isn't getting done right!

Hope my poems work though ^.^

2009-02-10 [Linderel]: This is a shocking development. There are more poetry entries than art ones. I just realised. o_O

2009-02-10 [Chimes]: I think it has something to do with this theme. :D It's a brilliant theme.

2009-02-10 [Linderel]: Indeed 'tis :D
(I think it was my idea, too.)

2009-02-10 [Chimes]: That sounds about right :)

2009-02-12 [Artsieladie]: Yes, if my memory serves me correctly, it was, [Linderel]. :)

2009-02-12 [Tickle Me Emo]: Hey, you guys closed the contest, but it's still Feb 11th in my time zone. Can I still submit my poem, or do I have to wait until next year (or just go to the DP)?

2009-02-12 [Artsieladie]: We as a rule close the contests at midnight Elftown time. We close it earlier than the 14th, so there is time for voting and such before the actual Valentine's Day. Since the poetry hasn't gone to voting yet, if you would like, send it to me and I'll put up for you. :)

2009-02-12 [Tickle Me Emo]: Agh, time zones can be so confusing! :/
But thank you very much :)

2009-02-12 [FamousPanda]: I agree, I had the same problem with another contest =P

2009-02-12 [Linderel]: Just remember to look at the Elftown clock and you'll be fine!

2009-02-12 [Artsieladie]: *nods* Thanks [Linderel] for closing the page. :)

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