2008-02-04 [Kim_Lundin]: I have some questions and pointers before I can accept this character. I'll start with the things that are most important. First, he seem unbalanced with no weaknesses to his great strengths and abilities. Since he's part vampire, shouldn't he be sensitive to sunlight, for instance?
Second, have you done the Make me a psion! test? That is a requirement for having psionic powers, since they need to be moderated in order to avoid powerplaying.
Now, those two are required to look into before your character can be accepted, beside those it would be good if you wrote a description of his Black Mist. What is it and what can it do? A little poking on his personality could be nice, but in no way a necessity.
Those are all things I can see at this point.
2008-02-05 [NamelessMerc]: Not to presume authority (as I have none XD) but "basic summoning" seems a bit vague...
What can he summon?
2008-02-06 [DSA]: He can summon small things, like animals(dog, cat, etc) but cant summon anything large or that requires alot of work for example (elephant, dragon, dinosaur). And sensitive to sunlight, to a degree, hes like a daywalker but cant be out for too long... and last but not least the Black Mist... its kinda like a vortex portal, but when he summons it, he gains increase of strength for a limited time, and his magic abilities are increased for a limited time... also it allows him to transport to places hes been before, like a teleport that he summons at will.
2008-02-06 [DSA]: Also currently working on a drawing of him... still in the works though
2008-02-06 [NamelessMerc]: You'd need Kim's advice too, but here are a few points I'd note.
Firstly, I'd see the Black Mist as a wee bit too powerful. Why not seperate it into two spells? One makes him stronger, one transports him. It evens out the power, as he'd only be able to do one thing at once, otherwise he could summon the portal, beef himself up at the same time and materialise a foot behind another character to pull off their head.
Also, it's a good idea to list in your profile a comprehensive list of summons. You couldn't summon anything larger than a dog, or maybe even a wolf I'd assume from your description, so list a set of concrete summons for yourself. Otherwise people might get confused, like I did XD
Oh, and the last thing: A Daywalker? Surely if he's a hybrid of two dark characters, a weakness to light is essential. Not to rain on your parade, but if he's a vampire who can walk around in daylight with no other weakness to speak of, then he's fairly a unbalanced character. Or, if you're set on that, why not give him a healing time for exposure to sunlight? If he's out there for, say, five hours (which I'd strongly suggest is the maximum you allow him) then he needs to spend a full day regenerating?
P.S. If you need any help with him, take a look at Alfonze Terret Malakos to give you an idea how to balance a character out.
2008-02-06 [Kim_Lundin]: Okay, that looks pretty fine for me. Once you've finished the psion test I think you're good to go :)
2008-02-06 [DSA]: Still got to work on the personality but that takes some time to think of
2008-02-09 [xido]: I like this character. It is an interesting concept.
I would like to see how the player posts in the future. If anyone is ever accused of powerplaying anymore, send them to me, to be evualted as Inath or Psionic characters. If they are neither, it means they need to begin learning to play more realistically.
I have evaluated and am watching this character. Best wishes, DarktSainedAng
2008-02-13 [Kim_Lundin]: I am going to assume that the psion test can be skipped for now, then. Since I can see no other things that need work, I will move this character to the WFR Guild Members.
Welcome to the WFR, [DSA] I hope you will enjoy your time here.
2008-02-19 [xido]: And of course, have fun. If you start powerplaying someone, I will sick my psionic Hell-hounds on you. :P ;)
2008-03-01 [xido]: Hey Dave, is this the main character of your RPG video game concept, or just one that you are playing in the interim?
He is interesting, but definitely more flashy than I expected him to be after hearing you describe the character concept... I had thought that the main character of your game would be more human-like, by the way you described it.
2008-03-01 [DSA]: Actually he's not the main character... but he does appear in it later on though... Still working on the rough spots of his profile though
2008-03-03 [xido]: Gotcha ;)